Teacher Feedback and Evaluation: Draft

As Draft Feed Back Sheet Sian

In terms of my cover, the issue raised was that the actual editing of my main image has remainders of a black outline which makes it appear less realistic. To over come this issue I have decided to retake the photographs on a plain background so it will enable me to cut out the person more effectively as well as neatly.

My contents also need several tweaks in order to produce a sufficient professional look. Firstly, my header on my contents needs further to the left of the page rather than being ambiguous in the middle as it distracts from the central image. In terms of the central image I need to reduce the size of the person so that it does not touch the contents header or come alongside it depending on the preference in the re-editing stage. My subheadings also need to be aligned with the page numbers so that it is more balanced and so there is no negative space above the page numbers. Personally, I also feel that more additions need to be made amount of text as I feel there is not enough text to fill the page and thus fit appropriately around different modes. The bold highlights that I used on the central features also need to be adapted to fit the colour palette from my front cover so that it represents my house style further. For my main image on my contents I also agree with feedback that it should be changed from black and white as it does not suit my genre. The coloured photo should represent the tone and style like other images used on my double page spread and cover. 

For my double page spread I firstly needed to adapt the kerning of the text "The new girl in town" as it may be too difficult to read especially with the shadow effect which may need to be edited to a lighter shade of grey. The top third of my page also is seperated into a panel area which needs to be shortened so it appears as if it is a constant reel of photos of outtakes. This will also add the characterisation of my artist and so my target audience can form a relationship through her fun and happy style. I will also retake my photos in order to achieve more angles and different looks to my artist. In terms of my text I also need to make sure that the columns of text are equal so I will achieve this by using a grid formation whilst editing to achieve a presice measurement. To also improve this I need to use a pull-quote in between the columns of text in order to draw in my reader more as well as making the text more digestable. To ensure that my artist profile is maintained I need to make sure I also add at the end of the text information about her latest single which is being promoted in the article.